Arden, great start to what I am sure is going to be a very erotic and "scary" story. Your use of words describes Viktor's world perfectly. No colour, no "existence", and no emotion. All of his existence revolves around the moon. A white light into his gray world.
The bar scene and the aftermath was great. Talking both men to the edge and, for Viktor, almost an escape. But he controlled the cage door. I can't wait till the cage opens in 3 days. Was this just a taste of what will happen? Let's hope so.
Dave, I owe you an apology! I accidentally deleted your comment and I'm honestly upset with myself about it because your words meant so much to me. Your comment was one of the most thoughtful responses I've ever received, and I want to make sure it's not lost.
For anyone who missed it, here's what Dave wrote:
"Arden, great start to what I am sure is going to be a very erotic and "scary" story. Your use of words describes Viktor's world perfectly. No colour, no "existence", and no emotion. All of his existence revolves around the moon. A white light into his gray world.
The bar scene and the aftermath was great. Talking both men to the edge and, for Viktor, almost an escape. But he controlled the cage door. I can't wait till the cage opens in 3 days. Was this just a taste of what will happen? Let's hope so."
Dave, you see things in my writing that make me a better writer. I'm deeply sorry for the accidental delete. Your words deserve to be here. They always will. 🖤
No worries about the deletion. In my work career of 42 years I always told my staff and trainees, anything you delete or screw up while learning can always be found and restored. 😊
I am glad that like my comments and views. You are a very unique writer and deserve to have a wider audience even in the times we live in.
No matter how good a person is at their craft, be it writing, music, art, cooking, or what ever medium they choose to use, as long as it reaches 1 person who then shares it with others, then the world will be a better place to live. And enjoy.
Keep writing and I will keep reading and responding.
I love the way your words make me see the world and feel.
Have a great weekend. Here in Minnesota, we are being promised(hah!), anywhere from 6 inches to 15+ inches of snow before Monday morning. 15 to 38 cm if you are across the pond.
But, thus is just another blast in the waning days of a typical Midwest winter. 😊
Dave, you just made my entire weekend. And probably my entire month.
42 years of wisdom in one message. I'm saving this because what you said about reaching just 1 person who shares it with others... that's the most beautiful definition of why we create that I've ever heard. I might frame that on my wall.
And knowing that my words make you see and feel... Dave, that's why I write. That sentence right there. That's the whole reason.
You keep reading. I keep writing. Deal. 🤝🖤
Stay warm in Minnesota! 15 inches of snow sounds like the Midwest version of Primal. Nature reminding everyone who's really in charge. 😊🐺
Have a wonderful weekend, Dave. You made mine better.
Dave, I have to stop and appreciate this comment for a moment. Because you didn't just read the story. You saw it.
The gray world. The absence of color, existence, emotion. The moon as white light cutting through all that nothingness. That's exactly what Viktor lives in. A world drained of everything except the countdown. Every day is just a space between moons. Every interaction is just a mask worn to survive the waiting.
And yes, you caught it perfectly. The bar scene was Viktor tasting the edge. Not crossing it. Not yet. His teeth grew but didn't bite. His eyes turned gold but no one saw. The cage door rattled but held. Barely.
You asked if this was just a taste of what will happen.
It was.
When the cage opens in three days, the gray world won't just get color. It will get red. The control Viktor fought so hard to maintain? It won't crack. It will shatter. And what comes out... doesn't negotiate. Doesn't hesitate. Doesn't stop.
You're reading between the lines, Dave. Keep doing that. Because in this story, the most dangerous things live between the lines. 🐺🖤
Dave, this is exactly the kind of reader every writer dreams of. Someone who doesn't just consume the words but engages with them. Digs into them. Looks for what's beneath the surface.
And what you said about discussion without offense? That's everything. Stories are meant to be felt differently by different people. The same scene can break one reader's heart and set another one's soul on fire. That's not disagreement. That's the magic of storytelling. It becomes something unique inside every person who reads it.
Your eyes catch things that I hide between the lines on purpose. Keep looking. Because in the chapters ahead, especially with Primal, there will be layers that need someone like you to find them.
Thank you for reading the way you do. It makes the writing matter more. 🖤
Edward, thank you so much! 🐺🔥 Your words mean the world to me. This story is something completely new for me, darker, wilder, more dangerous than anything I've written before. Viktor has been living inside my head for a while now, and I'm thrilled that he got under your skin too.
And trust me... you haven't seen anything yet. Chapter I was just the cage. The animal is still behind the bars. The full moon is three nights away.
When it arrives... there will be no more control. No more masks. No more pretending to be human.
Stay close. Chapter II is coming soon. And it bites. 🐺🖤
Great pacing, slow but anticipatory in the grey world, and with unexpected arrival of his world of colour, fast and dangerous. I’m looking forward to reading more.
Thank you, Janis. You caught exactly what I was doing — the grey world is slow on purpose. It has to breathe that way, that heaviness, that waiting. And then colour arrives and it doesn't ask permission. I'm glad the pacing worked for you. That contrast — slow burn, then the hit — that's the engine of the whole thing. More is coming.
Arden, great start to what I am sure is going to be a very erotic and "scary" story. Your use of words describes Viktor's world perfectly. No colour, no "existence", and no emotion. All of his existence revolves around the moon. A white light into his gray world.
The bar scene and the aftermath was great. Talking both men to the edge and, for Viktor, almost an escape. But he controlled the cage door. I can't wait till the cage opens in 3 days. Was this just a taste of what will happen? Let's hope so.
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Dave, I owe you an apology! I accidentally deleted your comment and I'm honestly upset with myself about it because your words meant so much to me. Your comment was one of the most thoughtful responses I've ever received, and I want to make sure it's not lost.
For anyone who missed it, here's what Dave wrote:
"Arden, great start to what I am sure is going to be a very erotic and "scary" story. Your use of words describes Viktor's world perfectly. No colour, no "existence", and no emotion. All of his existence revolves around the moon. A white light into his gray world.
The bar scene and the aftermath was great. Talking both men to the edge and, for Viktor, almost an escape. But he controlled the cage door. I can't wait till the cage opens in 3 days. Was this just a taste of what will happen? Let's hope so."
Dave, you see things in my writing that make me a better writer. I'm deeply sorry for the accidental delete. Your words deserve to be here. They always will. 🖤
Arden.
No worries about the deletion. In my work career of 42 years I always told my staff and trainees, anything you delete or screw up while learning can always be found and restored. 😊
I am glad that like my comments and views. You are a very unique writer and deserve to have a wider audience even in the times we live in.
No matter how good a person is at their craft, be it writing, music, art, cooking, or what ever medium they choose to use, as long as it reaches 1 person who then shares it with others, then the world will be a better place to live. And enjoy.
Keep writing and I will keep reading and responding.
I love the way your words make me see the world and feel.
Have a great weekend. Here in Minnesota, we are being promised(hah!), anywhere from 6 inches to 15+ inches of snow before Monday morning. 15 to 38 cm if you are across the pond.
But, thus is just another blast in the waning days of a typical Midwest winter. 😊
Dave, you just made my entire weekend. And probably my entire month.
42 years of wisdom in one message. I'm saving this because what you said about reaching just 1 person who shares it with others... that's the most beautiful definition of why we create that I've ever heard. I might frame that on my wall.
And knowing that my words make you see and feel... Dave, that's why I write. That sentence right there. That's the whole reason.
You keep reading. I keep writing. Deal. 🤝🖤
Stay warm in Minnesota! 15 inches of snow sounds like the Midwest version of Primal. Nature reminding everyone who's really in charge. 😊🐺
Have a wonderful weekend, Dave. You made mine better.
Arden 🖤
Dave, I have to stop and appreciate this comment for a moment. Because you didn't just read the story. You saw it.
The gray world. The absence of color, existence, emotion. The moon as white light cutting through all that nothingness. That's exactly what Viktor lives in. A world drained of everything except the countdown. Every day is just a space between moons. Every interaction is just a mask worn to survive the waiting.
And yes, you caught it perfectly. The bar scene was Viktor tasting the edge. Not crossing it. Not yet. His teeth grew but didn't bite. His eyes turned gold but no one saw. The cage door rattled but held. Barely.
You asked if this was just a taste of what will happen.
It was.
When the cage opens in three days, the gray world won't just get color. It will get red. The control Viktor fought so hard to maintain? It won't crack. It will shatter. And what comes out... doesn't negotiate. Doesn't hesitate. Doesn't stop.
You're reading between the lines, Dave. Keep doing that. Because in this story, the most dangerous things live between the lines. 🐺🖤
Dave, this is exactly the kind of reader every writer dreams of. Someone who doesn't just consume the words but engages with them. Digs into them. Looks for what's beneath the surface.
And what you said about discussion without offense? That's everything. Stories are meant to be felt differently by different people. The same scene can break one reader's heart and set another one's soul on fire. That's not disagreement. That's the magic of storytelling. It becomes something unique inside every person who reads it.
Your eyes catch things that I hide between the lines on purpose. Keep looking. Because in the chapters ahead, especially with Primal, there will be layers that need someone like you to find them.
Thank you for reading the way you do. It makes the writing matter more. 🖤
WOW!!!!! That was the best story I've read in awhile! The pictures were great too! Can't wait for the next part!
Edward, thank you so much! 🐺🔥 Your words mean the world to me. This story is something completely new for me, darker, wilder, more dangerous than anything I've written before. Viktor has been living inside my head for a while now, and I'm thrilled that he got under your skin too.
And trust me... you haven't seen anything yet. Chapter I was just the cage. The animal is still behind the bars. The full moon is three nights away.
When it arrives... there will be no more control. No more masks. No more pretending to be human.
Stay close. Chapter II is coming soon. And it bites. 🐺🖤
Great pacing, slow but anticipatory in the grey world, and with unexpected arrival of his world of colour, fast and dangerous. I’m looking forward to reading more.
Thank you, Janis. You caught exactly what I was doing — the grey world is slow on purpose. It has to breathe that way, that heaviness, that waiting. And then colour arrives and it doesn't ask permission. I'm glad the pacing worked for you. That contrast — slow burn, then the hit — that's the engine of the whole thing. More is coming.
Wow hot story
Thank you 😊
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